By Susan Reichert, Editor-in-Chief for Southern
Writers Magazine
In our world we have passive
people and action driven people.
A passive person tries to avoid conflict, where an
action person likes to get things done.
In our writing world, (in most English
sentences) there is active voice and passive voice.
Active–– the
person or thing is responsible for the action. Passive–– the subject is acted upon.
How many times when you are
writing your stories, do you see the little green line and clicking on it, find
it says your sentence is passive? Do you read over the sentence, and find a way
to take it from passive into active or do you leave it?
In searching for some good
examples, I came across a website called http://examples.yourdictionary.com/ . This website offers numerous examples of many things
that are helpful to writers, so check it out.
Here is a list of passive and
active examples that are on their website. Hope you find them as amusing as I
did. http://examples.yourdictionary.com/examples-of-active-and-passive-voice.html .
Here are a few I liked:
I ran the obstacle course in record time. (Active)
The obstacle course was run by me in record time. (Passive)
The obstacle course was run by me in record time. (Passive)
The crew paved the entire stretch of
highway. (Active)
The entire stretch of highway was paved by the crew. (Passive)
The entire stretch of highway was paved by the crew. (Passive)
The forest fire destroyed the whole
suburb. (Active)
The whole suburb was destroyed by the forest fire. (Passive)
The whole suburb was destroyed by the forest fire. (Passive)
If you look at each
sentence, you see the Active sentence
is tighter–also shorter.
I am not going to say
there aren’t times you may want to use a passive sentence, but I am going to
suggest that when you see that line under what you’ve written, spend a little
extra time on that sentence. Can the sentence be written in such a way as to
take it from passive into active? Does it make your sentence stronger if you do?
Does it make your writing tighter?
Have fun reading some of
the examples on Your Dictionary
website…link above.
Happy Writing!
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